tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9637785.post3415261472501516688..comments2023-10-11T05:18:15.891-05:00Comments on Bill's Bilge: FIRST KISSBill Fullertonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13525822318125971222noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9637785.post-10156630817175992762007-10-15T09:24:00.000-05:002007-10-15T09:24:00.000-05:00Grinning. I like the way she didn't say anything p...Grinning. I like the way she didn't say anything phony or insincere at the end, but merely stated the truth. No games. I liked the surprise! I loved this piece and I usually don't enjoy romance.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9637785.post-65335571703417739142007-10-11T17:25:00.000-05:002007-10-11T17:25:00.000-05:00Oh, what a fun story! I really enjoyed it. My only...Oh, what a fun story! I really enjoyed it. My only suggestion would be to change the title. We knew a kiss was coming, so it didn't catch as off-guard as you were aiming for. The best of luck!Shaunahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15891885596237514094noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9637785.post-8700057345599970182007-10-10T17:54:00.000-05:002007-10-10T17:54:00.000-05:00I only have one quick suggestion, to keep or toss ...I only have one quick suggestion, to keep or toss as it suits you! As bunnygirl said, there's not a lot of excess telling here -- so the paragraph describing the kiss seemed a little surprising to me. I'd maybe consider trimming it, or even just going right from "the unexpected kiss" to "seconds, minutes, hours."<BR/><BR/>Just my two cents! :)Elrenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11738565810912490256noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9637785.post-83816804562598373462007-10-09T09:51:00.000-05:002007-10-09T09:51:00.000-05:00ah Bill, you know how I feel about these two :), b...ah Bill, you know how I feel about these two :), but even the third time reading it, it still gets me right here.Bk30https://www.blogger.com/profile/16671460825580185581noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9637785.post-61390195146790301052007-10-08T10:22:00.000-05:002007-10-08T10:22:00.000-05:00it makes you wonder, how they'll end up together? ...it makes you wonder, how they'll end up together? such different people. I hope you share more.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9637785.post-4308531207470977672007-09-27T04:46:00.000-05:002007-09-27T04:46:00.000-05:00Lovely, Bill. Just lovely.You made the couple very...Lovely, Bill. Just lovely.<BR/><BR/>You made the couple very real for me. <BR/><BR/>Well done.Virginia Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10493643681622551814noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9637785.post-31557796539962231152007-09-24T21:38:00.000-05:002007-09-24T21:38:00.000-05:00I like this. It's very clean-- not a lot of exces...I like this. It's very clean-- not a lot of excess telling. And that makes it sexier, the impact of the kiss more immediate.Ann (bunnygirl)https://www.blogger.com/profile/04938134750150653386noreply@blogger.com