tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9637785.post115346052165104327..comments2023-10-11T05:18:15.891-05:00Comments on Bill's Bilge: COMING TOGETHER - excerptBill Fullertonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13525822318125971222noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9637785.post-1158324461275283062006-09-15T07:47:00.000-05:002006-09-15T07:47:00.000-05:00I haven't read past this chapter, so I don't know ...I haven't read past this chapter, so I don't know yet what I'll think of subsequent chapters, but at this point, I agree with Nancy's assessment that this doesn't feel like the story - it's backround information. Told very well, but background information anyway.<BR/><BR/>An opening chapter is best started in the middle of the action to grab readers. Background can go in later.<BR/><BR/>Still, you've got an easy reading style, which is good. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9637785.post-1158064978699217282006-09-12T07:42:00.000-05:002006-09-12T07:42:00.000-05:00I liked the first chapter and I must thanks Nancy ...I liked the first chapter and I must thanks Nancy for pointing this out. Hoping to read all fo the chapters gradually. I think Bill that you should travel Vietnam and I am sure you will be to write some great novels based on Vietnam.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9637785.post-1157951894293904092006-09-11T00:18:00.000-05:002006-09-11T00:18:00.000-05:00I like all the information and detail here, but I'...I like all the information and detail here, but I'm wondering -- could it be more effective later on in the book? <BR/><BR/>The description is really good, but this chapter seems to be more about setting things up than actually starting the story, if that makes sense. It's like they're both going somewhere, but not yet *doing* anything. <BR/><BR/>I'm reading the second chapter right now, and, in comparision, it grabbed my attention right away and it's a lot more interesting to me -- it's a good mix of conversation, action (as in plot progression), description, etc. <BR/><BR/>Just an idea, but maybe your second chapter could be bumped up? I think the info from the first chapter could be integrated later on...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com